Heaven’s children

image courtesy Stacy Plowright

They were bickering again. This time it was about him not taking the weekend off to visit her mother. As usual it had gone from there to blaming each other for their imperfect lives.

His daughter was supposed to keep an eye on them but had chosen to throw a tantrum. She was being no help to him. Taking care of his children was enough to drive a man crazy.

Zeus called the Nephelai and asked them to show themselves and their cloud carriages to the squabbling couple. If a sight as beautiful as this didn’t stop them, nothing would.

this story was written based on the photo prompt at the top. For more stories on this prompt here’s where you need to gohttp://madison-woods.com/index-of-stories/083112-3/

46 responses to “Heaven’s children

  1. I loved the way this moved from the mundane to the mythological. ‘cloud carriages’ – lovely. Well done

  2. You got the same mythology inspiration I did! Those clouds certainly do it. It’s a shock going from the humdrum to the celestial. I wonder, though, if you have a character or two too many in the humdrum part. I wasn’t quite sure about the daughter watching them (the children, the bickering couple?). Or are the two paragraphs different scenes from different apartments there? Just a bit confused on that. I agree with Sandra about the cloud carriages! Just right!

    Here’s mine: http://wrasselings.blogspot.com/2012/08/friday-fictioneers-clouds-in-toronto.html

    • According to Greek mythology Zeus is the father of Aphrodite, the goddess of love. Zeus also had Demigods for children who live on earth as normal humans. The husband in the couple is Zeus’s Demigod son. Hence what I meant was as the Goddess of Love it was Aphrodite’s duty to watch over her half brother’s love life.

      The celestial start from the second paragraph..

      Does that help?

  3. I like this, the way the gods came in the picture, very brilliant. Mine is here

  4. I love your imagination with this.

  5. Good story–successful humanization of Zeus and his demigod offspring. Hope the cloud carriages do the trick.

  6. Ahhh, so that explains what causes those storms!! Gods bickering 😉

  7. You mixed the human and gods very nicely. Good job.

  8. Oh my goodness, what creativity you’ve used during this piece. Awesome job!

  9. Wow, this is the ultimate example of “I’m telling mom!” Hope the poor man finds some peace. Nicely done.

  10. Cloud carriages! Novel! 🙂
    Good work!

  11. Inventive! Never would’ve gone there on my own. Thanks for the ride and thanks for the comments on my story.

  12. Dear Ms. Contradictoryoptimist,

    Third sentence in this otherwise delightful story is confusing (there/their wise). Which is it, please? No matter which I pick the sentence still means something. The question derails my train of thought just outside of the station, which is why I mention it.

    Particularly enjoyed the cloud carriages and the characterization of the gods as merely mortal re their behavior.




    • Dear Doug

      Thank you so much for pointing that out. I must have been a little hungry when I wrote that considering I ate up the ‘to’ that should have come after ‘there’. The edit has been made thanks to your observation. 🙂

      So happy that you enjoyed the piece otherwise. 🙂

  13. Happy to help and happier still that you’re not miffed that I was puzzled and said so. Cool.



  14. Interesting transition. Took me a couple reads to figure it out.

  15. Nice try, Zeus, but i’m not sure they will notice the sky! I love how this prompt has inspired mythology stories – I think Stacey will be a fan too.
    I’m over here – http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/friday-fiction-white-pegasi/

  16. Way to throw me for a loop at the end! (I love when that happens) Really nice story!

  17. My son and daughter in-law are fighting. She left, took the kids, and appears to be using them as leverage. Could you send some cloud carraiges over this way?

  18. thatcontrary....

    Superlative, love the word play

  19. thatcontrary....

    Been reading Percy Jackson huh?

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